Tuesday, July 14, 2009

Plz help me!! Urgent !!?

I have written an e-mail. Could you plz rewrite it in the better way?? plzzzzzz


The bank is writing an e-mail to a company to ensure them of the availability of the buyer’s bank account.








“Referring to the.............'s requesting. We would like to inform you that the mentioned company has a/c in our bank. The company can use the amount of money available 35000000 USD for opening L/C (letter of credit) considering the Bank's terms and its policies.





This certification has issued for the company's application and has no other values."

Plz help me!! Urgent !!?
Normally a bank should have a budget for English editing.


I only know of a/c meaning air conditioning.
Reply:Help is at your door-step. Please open the door of knowledge you'll find the help.
Reply:they can use $35,000,000????????????
Reply:We refer to .......'s request. Please be advised that the mentioned company has a deposit of ....... USD for the purpose of letter of credit, subject to the bank's terms and policies.





This certification is issued for the company's application and has no other values.
Reply:Joe17 and TK have given you good


re-writes.





I would add one very important point





"in the amount of 35000000USD ( Thirty Five Thousand U.S. Dollars)"








You need, for your own/bank's protection spell out the


actual total amount in addition to entering it numerically and add the appropriate decimals ie is it 350,000.00USD or 35,000.00USD?





Good Luck
Reply:With reference to (company name)'s request, we would like to inform you that it has an account of USD35000000 with us.





The (company name) can issue Letter of Credit (L/C) in accordance with our terms and its policies.





This certification has been issued for the company's application and has no other values.
Reply:Referring to the ....'s request, we would like to inform you that the mentioned company has an account in our bank. The company can use the amount of money in the sum of 35000000 USD for opening a letter of credit in accordance with the Bank's terms and policies.





This certification has been issued for the company's application and has no other value.





Not 100% sure about the context but I think this is a bit better.


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